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You need to seperate your first paragraph. You have a lot of good information, but it does not stand out because its all stuck together. I liked how you linked your sources. | You need to seperate your first paragraph. You have a lot of good information, but it does not stand out because its all stuck together. I liked how you linked your sources. | ||
-Whitney Behel | -Whitney Behel | ||
not easy to scan. need to redesign. This will make it easy to read |
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