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The long paragraphs take away from the information. I do not know for sur, but I don't think we were supposed to use "I".-Amberly Keough | The long paragraphs take away from the information. I do not know for sur, but I don't think we were supposed to use "I".-Amberly Keough | ||
This entry has a huge opening paragraph. I don't think people would want to read it to get the imformation. D Davis |
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