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Your entry seemed to be well thought out but it needs to be put in a different order. You start out giving example phrases as tittles then you change it up and use just plain statements. You need a consistent format for how you do your entry, over all it was easy to scan for pertinent information, but you need more than two resources. | Your entry seemed to be well thought out but it needs to be put in a different order. You start out giving example phrases as tittles then you change it up and use just plain statements. You need a consistent format for how you do your entry, over all it was easy to scan for pertinent information, but you need more than two resources. | ||
--[[User:Apitt329|Apitt329]] 13:21, 24 Mar 2005 (EST) | --[[User:Apitt329|Apitt329]] 13:21, 24 Mar 2005 (EST) | ||
Great entry. You covered a great amount of information with out confusing the reader. Anthony Jones | |||
There are a lot of bolded writing that immediatly catches the reader's attention. Check for typo errors.--[[User:Dflowers|Dflowers]] 19:53, 24 Mar 2005 (EST) | |||
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Are you sure this is the clearest way you could have set up this entry? You list works cited, but you cite no works. Why do you use '''remember'''? I would consider reorganizing this entry. --[[User:Glucas|Glucas]] 11:12, 25 Apr 2005 (EDT) |