The word states (you spelled it "state's") is spelled incorrectly.Clarify, or try to simplify facts. -Amberly Keough
Define the first list for word choice and wordiness. The point was stated clearly through the paper. -Robert Bartosh
If you stated what wordiness and redundency are, the topic would be a lot easier to understand. Your examples were helpful. You may want to space some of the different subjects out so certain topics will stand out. -Whitney Behel
This entry is put together well. The grammer is good. The entry is staight to the point. D Davis
check wiki to revise page. ok daniel Epps
The entry could use a table of contents. You gave all the right info that you needed. If you use headings to break up your sections it will be more friendly to the scrolling eye.- Dave Burkert
Liked usage of lists in this one. There were a few errors to look over. Might go a little more in-depth. -Terence Heenan
Good entry. Great organization. Minor spelling errors. Anthony Jones
Paper was well written and it had good points. Topic chosen was illustrated in an effective way for the internet. It was easy to scan for important information, and good examples were being used. Over all paper was well written and no grammatical errors were noticed. Writer may have chosen to use bold print to illustrate things, but paper was good
--Apitt329 13:32, 24 Mar 2005 (EST)
"That baby is gargantuan." This is not a wordy sentence, nor does it sound "ridiculous." You need to redefine "wordiness." Your list of works cited is also formatted oddly. --Glucas 10:59, 25 Apr 2005 (EDT)