A lot of great information. You need to break up the long paragraphs and add a table of contents. The information just needs to broke up in to sections. Bold and add bullets to information. You could add links to the page and put a works cited area for where you got the information. - Dave Burkert
The long paragraphs take away from the information. I do not know for sur, but I don't think we were supposed to use "I".-Amberly Keough