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== | == Redundancy == | ||
" A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the same reason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine no unnecessary parts. This requires not that the writer make all his sentences short, or that he avoid all detail, but that every word tells. If a writer fails to do this his paper may suffer from redundancy"(Grammar). | " A sentence should contain no unnecessary words, a paragraph no unnecessary sentences, for the same reason that a drawing should have no unnecessary lines and a machine no unnecessary parts. This requires not that the writer make all his sentences short, or that he avoid all detail, but that every word tells. If a writer fails to do this his paper may suffer from redundancy"(Grammar). | ||
;;Redundancy causes wordiness by: | |||
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Redundancy causes wordiness by | |||
*using unneccessary repetitions, | *using unneccessary repetitions, | ||
*saying the samething twice, | *saying the samething twice, | ||
*using unnecessary words, | *using unnecessary words, | ||
and | |||
*using empty clauses and phrases | *using empty clauses and phrases. | ||
== Avoiding Redundancy == | == Avoiding Redundancy == | ||
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'''Example''' 1: | '''Example''' 1: | ||
'' | ''Incorrect:'' Our fifth patient, in room six, is a mentally ill patient. | ||
'' | ''Correct:'' Our fifth patient, in room six, is mentally ill. | ||
'''Example''' 2: | '''Example''' 2: | ||
'' | ''Incorrect:'' The best teachers help each student to become a better student both academically and emotionally. | ||
'' | ''Correct:'' The best teachers help each student grow both academically and emotionally. | ||
;; Saying the Same Thing Twice | ;; Saying the Same Thing Twice | ||
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'''Example''' | '''Example''' | ||
'' | ''Incorrect:'' There well always be a person or group who will test the legislature and publish libelous statements as long as they can until they are caught. | ||
''Eliminating "there" and "be" and putting the subject and verb in their proper place will make the sentence more concise.'' | ''Eliminating "there" and "be" and putting the subject and verb in their proper place will make the sentence more concise.'' | ||
'' | ''Better:'' People will always test the legislature and publish libelous statements as long as they can until they are caught. | ||
''Better, but there remains a repetition of the word "they." Get rid of the repetition.'' | ''Better, but there remains a repetition of the word "they." Get rid of the repetition.'' | ||
'' | ''Correct:'' People test the legislature by publishing libelous statements as long as they can.(OWL) | ||
;;Empty Clausing and Phrases | ;;Empty Clausing and Phrases | ||
"An empty clause is one that can be reduced to a phrase, and an empty phrase is one that can be reduced to a simply phrase or a single word (Grammar)". | "An empty clause is one that can be reduced to a phrase, and an empty phrase is one that can be reduced to a simply phrase or a single word (Grammar)". | ||
''Phrases to Avoid'' | ''Phrases to Avoid:'' | ||
in my opinion, | |||
in today's society, and etc.... | in today's society, and etc.... | ||
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